Dinner was lovely. She laughed at my jokes, told me about her life, even confessed to "issues" with her college friends.
What a nice girl...a career! No wrist scars! No psychotic insecurity!
I walked her to her car and asked "So, I'd love to see you again...what are you doing this weekend?"
"Well, I dunno" she said, "you are a lot more out of shape than I remembered."
Ouch.
"Well, I can lose the weight, but fixing your acne scars is going to get expensive."
She slapped me...not softly.
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This story summarizes how difficult it is for two out-spoken individuals to have a positive relationship. Whether the relationship is centered on romance or even business, it's simply difficult to say what's on your mind, without a filter, and keep other "type A" people as friends and colleagues. (With the personalities displayed here, it would be difficult to keep _anyone_ in your circle but the sulking and timid.)
I notice you make heavy use of ellipses in your stories. I'm not sure when ellipses are appropriate in prose. I find no reference to ellipses in "The Elements of Style" (Strunk & White). "Elements" does mention dashes: "Use a dash to set off an abrupt break or interruption and to announce a long appositive or summary."
Ellipses are all over my writing, which is probably why I noticed them in yours.