The rattle of the opening door made her wince. What if he heard and wondered why she was coming home so late? She carefully put her things down while stepping out of her shoes. Stop. Listen. Nothing. Good.
She brushed her teeth and undressed quickly. Better to have him think she was feeling frisky than risk waking him up by changing in the bedroom.
She tiptoed to their room, pushed open the door, and froze. Even in the dark it was glaringly obvious that the perfectly made bed was empty.
“Where could he be this late?” She wondered, incredulously.
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Ha! Great closing line. This was very well written. You grabbed my attention from the beginning and kept it all the way through to the end. Good job!
I really liked this story. It has substance to it and it grabbed my attention RIGHT from the get-go! The ending is what makes this story really good though. The whole time she is thinking she cant wake him and then comes to realize he's not even there. It makes me wonder what she was doing that she didnt want to risk him waking. At the same time, where is he?! I know it can only be 100 words but theres so much that you could build into this story! Like how bad this "couples" relationship is or where they both are that late at night. It's like there is so much to still be said!
Enjoyed the suspense, the surprise, and the mystery.
The four one-word sentences feed the tone; they're short and syncopated, lending themselves to being sneaky. Nice action verbs - tiptoed, froze.
Nitpick: Do you need the adverbs, particularly "incredulously"?